The fic is 6551 words long. BIG HUGE HONKIN' sex scene that I totally suck at writing, so I need someone to look that over and tell me what sucks about it so I can fix it.
Also: continuity, grammar, characterization, all that stuff needs to be looked at. I think I chickified Spike, and because I've been looking at the thing for so long, I can't find where I went wrong.
Needs to be back to me by Monday, as that's my posting day at the comm. Please help me??